If you likecheesy depressing poetry will you please read this and tell me what you think? (i didnt w

what do you think of this.How does it make you feel.(i feel like doctor phil hahah!)

chained down by reality cut open by stress

So down to earth her wrist has a gashing crevis

So scared sad and confused a mess

She feels like everyone could care less

Black mascara and eyeliner running down her pale pink cheeks

Along with the tears of misery puring down like a stream

Red lipstick smeared across her thick lips

The same color as the blood running down her wrists

lieing on the cold linoleum floor

her dark hair across her face she has been here before

Her brown eyes filled with a pained __expression so far from dry

she knows she has to leave here this is her last cry

cracks open a bottle of toxic stuff poors it down her throat

falls down to the floor as her favorite band pumping through the speakers plays the last note

closes her eyes her brain turns off

her boyfriend comes home and he wants to scoff

Why because she looked so elegant in that black dress

with her pretty little face and dark makeup her black hair a mess

he holds her as tears fall from his face

One last time he kisses her ruby lips and can taste her beauty and grace!

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If you likecheesy depressing poetry will you please read this and tell me what you think? (i didnt write it)?

ITS IS A VERY DEEP POEM...FOR THOSE WHO HAVE BEEN THERE IN ONE WAY OR ANOTHER THEY CAN RELATE...FOR THOSE WHO HAVE NOT IT MAY SOUND HORRID AND SICK...I THINK IT HAS DEPTH AND SOUL FULL OF SADNESS...

If you likecheesy depressing poetry will you please read this and tell me what you think? (i didnt write it)?

why do you keep asking the same question?

If you likecheesy depressing poetry will you please read this and tell me what you think? (i didnt write it)?

As you say, it's not very good poetry. The forced rhymes, the spelling, the lack of any poetic structure.... the inconsistency (presumably her boyfriend would not be tasting 'beauty and grace' but rather the 'toxic stuff' she had just imbibed!) and the grotesque images...

However..... I'd be less concerned about the quality of the poem and more concerned about whoever wrote it. To me this sort of self-expression looks like a cry for help - or at least a preoccupation with pain and death that should be a warning signal to friends and family. The feeling that 'everyone could care less' (sic) is probably one of the most depressing and enervating (energy-sucking) emotions on the planet. I hope no one you know feels this way!

Thanks for posting and asking. Perhaps you are in a position to get some one some help, or at least a listening ear.

If you likecheesy depressing poetry will you please read this and tell me what you think? (i didnt write it)?

Very depressing- I feel for the sad woman. Despite the spelling errors, it has a very nice flow.